Our first draft of this story contained the same storyline as the one now but using what we've learned from watching the other short films, we have constructed richer characters with a back story, believable plot points that are minimal to keep it simple and still kept our superman twist in our theme.
Treatment:
Like most young boys Alfie always saw his Dad(Dan) as his hero. Doing most father duties his Dad was his idol. They played football together, ate ice cream together and he taught Alfie how to ride a bike. Being his Dad's sidekick was all he ever wanted. But the adventures were always cut short by Mummy(Karly) putting little Alfie to bed.
Meanwhile . . . What Alfie did not know, Daddies hidden addiction to Kryptonite was much stronger than his love for his family; but even after 5 long, yet strenuous, years mummy couldn't take it anymore. Karly leaves Dan and Alfie behind, believing they will live a happier life full of adventures without her, and hopes Dan will change his ways now he has to look after his son. But once she walks out and Alfie grows older, one drunken night after another, Daddy's super hero qualities soon fade and Alfie sees him for the villain he really is.
In addition to these changes, we changed the names to make the characters younger. We decided Karly would have more motivation to leave her family if she had been sucked into it from a young age. Giving her the back story that her and Dan fell in love young and had Alfie early on in life. So for the majority of her 20s she was stuck in a dead end family routine that she didn't want. Not to mention Dans growing alcohol addiction to drive her away more.
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